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     The little girl sat on the too tall chair, contently swinging her legs as she doodled. The group of teachers near her murmured and glanced down at her every so often. The girl looked up and watched as a couple of boys run around the class room. She smiled, but didn't get up to join them, nor did she go over to the other girls who were giggling and gossiping. Flipping to a new page in her notebook, the girl began rapidly drawing another silly doodle. After a couple of minutes, a bell sounded and the extra teachers left the classroom. The day went by, filled with funny moments and enjoyable coloring activities. As the last assignment of the day, the 4th graders were given a blank sheet of paper and told to draw something they wanted. Slowly the teacher made her way around the room.
     "What did you draw?" She asked each student.
     "A cat!"
     "A car!"
     "Ice cream!"
     "A teddy bear!"
     The answers all mimicked each others simpleness. The teacher smiled and nodded in approval. Then she got the the girl's desk. 
     "What are you doing?!?" She screeched. The little girl jumped, dropping her creation. She had torn the paper into shapes, out of which she had made a cat. It's arms and legs and tail and head were all attached by being woven into a rip she had made in the body. The teacher looked down in horror. The girl looked up in fear. "That paper was for drawing! You tore it up!" She yelled. By now, the whole class was watching. The embarrassed and confused girl felt warm tears pushing from behind her eyes. Her noes tingled and she sniffed, wiping her cheeks on her jacket sleeve.
     "I made a cat..." She said, meekly holding it up for the teacher to see. The enraged teacher snatched it up and crushed it in her hands. 
     "Follow the rules! I said to draw something, not to be destructive." She tossed the paper cat into the trash bin and sat down at her own desk with a huff. The girl sat in her desk, crying silently, mourning the loss of her creation. 
When the end of the day bell rang, she got her back pack from her cubby and dragged it behind her. She peered into the trashcan, her eyes searching for the cat, but there was already too much trash that had covered it. With burning eyes threatening to spill fresh tears, the girl shuffled out of the room. As she passed one of the other rooms, she over heard her teacher complaining to her colleagues.
     "I hate the ADHD ones! So hyper and they never sit still. All I say goes in one ear and out the other! I swear, it'd be more productive to try and catch smoke in my hands!"

Thank you all so much for the feed back!

And because it keeps getting asked, yes, this is a true story. (Though it's been put into story form and different dialog and of course, no naming names.)
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anickakobrlova Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2012
Poor cat. :( I don't like that teacher. :P He's evil! And bad. Just simply destroy someone's creation, it's bad. Btw, this is how was created your name, isn't it? :)
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Smokey-Doodle Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2012  Student General Artist
Yes, she was evil...
And yes, this is how I created my name~
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anickakobrlova Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012
Oh, she, sorry... ^^;
Really cool story! 8-) :) I want so interesting nick too... o3o :D
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SorentheCrazyCrayon Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012
I WILL find and kill this teacher...
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Smokey-Doodle Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Student General Artist
^-^'
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ToAtoneArt Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Professional Writer
Wow, what a bitch. We've all had teachers like that before, but seriously... It's like 'The grass is green, the sky is blue' all over again. I'm sorry that happened to you.

Did you really even have ADHD, or was she just trying to be insulting by suggesting you had a mild mental disorder? Some teachers throw out things like that, I've heard, which insults the kid who doesn't have it, as well as those that really do, inferring that being who they are is bad, or wrong. :(
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Smokey-Doodle Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Student General Artist
Actually I did have ADHD~
And it does make you feel inferior or make you question if you're as good as other kids, but my mom and dad were always supportive and interested in my life, so I was fine~
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ToAtoneArt Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Professional Writer
Good. Because there's nothing any more wrong with you than a person with blonde hair, or someone with brown eyes, or whatever. :D
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synesthesicchick Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
^^ smoke in the hands.
lol love ya girly,
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Smokey-Doodle Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Student General Artist
^-^
Love you too ChimyCherryChickyChanga!
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synesthesicchick Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
^^
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Bakumi Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012
That's so sad ): Great story!


though, i can seriosly relate.
i get this crap from people all of the time about my ADHD... i hate it so much, it hurts so bad, they aren't aware how I feel though. its not something i can help...
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Smokey-Doodle Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Student General Artist
I know, it's like they think ADHD means stupid...It always sucks when teachers don't like you because you're ADHD...
:C
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Bakumi Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012
indeed ):
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EpicLolipopz Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012
...that teacher must've been really butthurt... Just saying xD
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Smokey-Doodle Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Student General Artist
XD
Yea, she was~
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EpicLolipopz Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012
Did you ever get her back for that?
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Smokey-Doodle Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Student General Artist
No! I was only in 4th grade!
XD
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EpicLolipopz Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012
Ddarrrrrrrrnnnn!!! XD
If I were you, I would've gotten some superglue and poured it all over her desk and chair so if she ever sat on her chair or touched her desk, then she would've been suck and forced to- then again, I would probably be expelled for that...
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ToAtoneArt Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Professional Writer
But you would have had serious cool points and props for life. :D
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EpicLolipopz Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012
super glue is al I need for life xD
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ToAtoneArt Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Professional Writer
XD
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Smokey-Doodle Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Student General Artist
XD
lul~
That would've been interesting, indeed!
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EpicLolipopz Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012
Well I have done it to a kid in my art class before (glued him to his chair) .. I never got caught lol xD
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Smokey-Doodle Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Student General Artist
:D
COOL!
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ilovekurosakitasuku Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
did this really happen?
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Smokey-Doodle Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Student General Artist
Yea~
My elementary school didn't like anything different or GT (gifted and talented.)
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ScreamingIntoSilence Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Jerk Teacher! Almost Sounds Like My Art Teachers, Lols! But, It's Good!
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Smokey-Doodle Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Student General Artist
Thanks~
Yeesh! Art teacher? Daaang.
Thanks for the comment!
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ScreamingIntoSilence Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
You're Welcome!
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SethTree Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012
And like someone above said, there was repetition, but hardly any and it was something you'd really only be able to fix if you looked up big annoying words for "teacher" or if you just slapped that ho's name on there. :P
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Smokey-Doodle Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Student General Artist
XD
Sorry, no naming names~
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SethTree Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012
That's what pseudo names are for ;A; Let's call her Ms. Pricklepuss :)
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Smokey-Doodle Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Student General Artist
XD
Nice!
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SethTree Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012
3rd line "them. Nor" should be "them, nor" because you can't start a sentence with a conjunction. At the end of the 13th line you forgot an apostrophe in "girl's" because - for all intents and purposes - the desk belongs to the girl. 5th line from the bottom should be "cat, but" for the same reason as the first thing I mentioned. Same line, "that had cover it" should be "that had covered it" because it's already been covered as opposed to currently being covered.

That's all I see, really. Everything else was either perfect or not a big enough deal to stress on, and to be honest, most of your mistakes - had you given this to an editor - would have remained untouched and published because society's English skills are slowly wasting away :)....~Twitch~

Anyway, great job :D Delightfully sad story :D Lol, and don't worry, we reap what we sow. That teacher was probably attacked by a pack of pachyderms during her vacation to the savanna because of the solitary peanut that had taken refuge in the extremities of her satchel :)
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Smokey-Doodle Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Student General Artist
Thank you so much!
Precisely! That's why I like getting a teacher to edit!

One can only hope that such a fate befell her...
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Bri-Sama14 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012
I love it, that not something you expext a teacher to say to a student.:love:
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Smokey-Doodle Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Student General Artist
-_-
I really hated that teacher.
Thanks for commenting~
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Bri-Sama14 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012
you welcome
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EART1 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Just a tiny dose of repetition, but other than that, really good.
My name's not quite that deep.
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Smokey-Doodle Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Student General Artist
Thanks for commenting!
Hm, repetitive? Yea... I can see that now...
THank you!
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EART1 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I think the only word that jumped out at me was "teacher" a lot, but it's a good bit of writing.
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Smokey-Doodle Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2012  Student General Artist
Thanks, I've been trying to think of some synonyms or substitutes...
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EART1 Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Colleague?
Um...
...Colleague? (Try thesaurus.com)
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musicnote854 Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It was really good.
This gives me a flash back of something I did simmilar to this :iconro-flashplz:
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Smokey-Doodle Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2012  Student General Artist
Thanks so much for the comment~
Yea? What was it?
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kerucupcake Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I really liked it~ It was kind of sad, but I thought it was kind of cute as well (that may have been just me. I apparently have a strange sense of 'cute' o.O). anyway, it was nice, and fairly well-written, and I enjoyed reading it ^.^
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Smokey-Doodle Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2012  Student General Artist
It must've gotten it's job done then, it was indeed supposed to be sad and cute~
Thank you so much for commenting!
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kerucupcake Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh good, so it wasn't just me and my 'weird cute' xDDD
No problem~ ^.^
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